New Storyboards:-

The Choice Of Song:-

We decided to base our song choice on The End Where I Begin - The Script because it related to the topic and main idea of our film. As the music we used in our opening sequence could not be copyright, we realised we could not use the actual version of the song. So we therefore got another student (Emma Claydon) to play an instrumental version on the piano, changing a few notes here and there so it wasn't the same.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2b7p2Pr_Rhg

The name of the song, also had links to the idea that the story was cyclical. And what happened could easily happen again and again to either the same or different people. It also reflected the negativity of the story.

Flashback:-

Having a flashback in our opening sequence meant we could include a section of montage editing. 

To make it apparent to the audience it was a flashback we decided we needed to add some kind of effect in order to make it clear and understandable. We therefore added an echo effect that made the shots echo creating a blur. This worked well and our audience knew that it was a flashback meaning we had made it clear enough to understand.

Audience Feedback Changes, Voice Over:-

We decided the hospital scene wasn't clear enough for the audience as to who died, be it the female or male. 

After thinking this through, we came up with various ideas.
Such as adding a voice over of a nurse telling the protagonist of the unfortunate loss of her boyfriend, due to the car crash.
Seeing the male in the hospital or at the scene of the crash.
Or perhaps seeing the female afterwards, looking at possessions or belongings of the male and crying over them.

The Name Of The Film:-

We decided that the main idea in the film would be cyclical and keep happening to the same girl, suggesting she is the one perhaps causing or creating the incidents that happen.

As we decided it was a car crash and the male would die, this meant the female would be left alone and would most probably end up mourning over the death of her boyfriend. Referring back to the cyclical idea means that she would be mourning more than once. We therefore decided to call the film, The Mourning After.

Audience Feedback Changes, Crash:-

Our storyline has always been based around a car crash, we felt this was the main event that took place in our opening and perhaps the thing that was most engaging for the audience.

When researching different films and looking at clips and scenes for inspiration and ideas we came across Raise Your Voice, which is where our most prominant thoughts came from for the crash.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6V87Q9GsoFw

This is the link to the section of Raise Your Voice that gave us the most influential ideas.

Audience Feedback Changes, Circle Theme:-

Our initial film idea, was tied together by a theme. We wanted to run a theme through the opening sequence, we decided this would be circles as it reflected the idea of the continuity of the storyline and the fact that the same thing kept on happening.

When we presented our pitch, the initial feedback from our classmates was that they didn't fully understand the importance or significance of the circles. Once we explained further, they became more interested and thought the idea was perhaps better than first expected.

From hearing this, we decided we either needed to make it more apparent to the audience or remove the idea. We tried to make the idea more apparent but with our new footage it wasn't as easy as we first thought. We did however include the idea into a few of our shots like the carousel ones or the ones where you see a point of view from the female protagonist spinning around.

Audience Feedback Changes, Isolation:-

When we presented our pitch to the class, we discussed the idea of singling out the female protagonist from a  crowd making her appear more isolated and individual. When the class fed back to us, we realised they liked the idea of singling out the protagonist. So we decided to use this idea in our opening.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7ZfEEzKFEv8

We watched the opening scene of Collateral and we liked how the two males were singled out in a crowd, we therefore used this scene to develop our idea and make it more apparent.

Audience Feedback Changes, Drugs:-

After seeing the rest of the pitches from the people in our class, we realised every group had decided to incorporate the idea of drugs in their opening sequence. From seeing this, we as a group therefore decided against the idea as we didn't want our film to be too similar to anyone else's or be compared to another groups.